Can you give me some feedback on these lyrics please?

Your lyrics are awesome, as well! haha nice, you have every part of a song (verse, chorus, bridge, and an ender). I really think they are super original, have not heard a song like it (obviously haha) and for the melody...I suggest you find a tune on your piano or guitar and after you've made it, sing your lyrics to it. It works for me! Good luckk